A Contemplative Post

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  1. OnlyAnEgg

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    Behind my hut
    in the Clear Creek gorge
    are many fierce and ferocious creatures
    While I cannot see them, directly, from where I sit
    in front of my home
    I have seen them
    I can hear them
    But, they grow more distant with each passing moment

    Before me is the lush green
    of the gorge
    The smell of the forest and loam
    the sounds of the gentle life
    and, it is within these things
    that I sit
    and wait

    The creatures behind me
    will, one day, fade
    until they exist only as the most primal of memories
    Unless I ask them to return
     
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    That was pretty nice.
     
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    Thank you
     
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    Original work?
     
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    Yes. I used to write quite a bit (a few are here and there on this board) and I'm starting to write, again.
    This piece was inspired by much older Zen-styled pieces.
     
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    I don't think most people appreciate how difficult it is to write poetry. I've never quite gotten the hang of it and gave up on it long ago. Nicely done, bro. I used to write as well, just now getting back into it. Kind of fun.

    Of course with enjoying reading as much as I do, and this damn forum which I love - needs to be more hours in the day.
     
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    Thank you. I hope you can find a way back into writing. It's fulfilling, to me.

    As for this place, I used to mod and mentor. Contributed, some, to Karate and Philosophy. I'm looking to pick up wing chun training here and thought I'd poke my nose back in. It's still a thriving community, it seems!
     
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    Beautiful poem. Man's struggle to improve?
     
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    In a large sense, of course. Every personal struggle is a micro-analog of the larger picture. While this, literally, is about my current mind, the broad application is entirely spot on.

    Thank you.
     
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    Ah that was beautiful, enjoyed it very much :).

    "Before me is the lush green
    of the gorge
    The smell of the forest and loam
    the sounds of the gentle life
    and, it is within these things
    that I sit
    and wait"

    Ahhhh loved that bit.. I've been writing alot more the last couple of years, not as poetic sounding but still coming through without any sort of thought or planning which is nice...

    Feel free to post more of those :)
     

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